What am I?
Dear Brianna,
I hate when you throw your binders o me
it hurts when you squeeze in a lot of books
but it feels nice when you clean it up
it gives me room to breathe
i also like it when you get the combination right
doing it so many times it's just annoying
but please don't kick me when you mess up!
Comments
I liked your poem alot. Thats probly how my locker feels. My suggestion is to leave everything as it is.
Posted by: Jeremy, Lit 2 | April 21, 2006 09:55 AM
was your poem on a backpack if it was good job in explaining it
Posted by: pm | April 24, 2006 09:31 AM
I really liked your poem. I think your a very tallented poet.
Posted by: Jesse M. | April 24, 2006 09:41 AM
I liked your poem. Check your grammar.
FWMS
Posted by: Sarah C. | April 24, 2006 09:43 AM
You really went deep into the emotion and the persona about this object. I liked it a lot!
Posted by: D.B. | April 24, 2006 10:00 AM
I liked it, a bit short though the ending could use some fine tuning not that its bad the way it is I just think it could use work
Posted by: cody H. | April 24, 2006 03:34 PM
It's a locker.
Posted by: [KiDs] Sgt. Zip | April 25, 2006 08:16 AM
I like that it was personal and you were able to let everyone read it. Were you talking about a locker?
Posted by: Ashley.R. (Bonner) | May 4, 2006 12:03 PM
this is a cool poem, i did'nt really understand it until i read it again. i think you should have put in the title it was abut your locker
Posted by: Chandler L.(bonner) | May 4, 2006 12:12 PM
I like how you made it seem you're writing a letter to your locker. I also like that the locker is like one of those people that can be really mean sometimes, and nice sometimes too. You may want to run a grammer/spell check on it though. 7.5/10
Posted by: Dylan Y. (Bonner) | May 4, 2006 03:59 PM
it's a locker.... Great detail. But you should check your spelling
Posted by: Travis(bonner) | May 5, 2006 11:48 PM
I like your poem because it tells about the binders feelings but i think you should of mad eit ryhm a little bit....!!!!
Posted by: ryley(bonner) | May 7, 2006 02:38 PM
Hey great poem. I could relate but we don't have lockers right now! It would be easy for a "locker" to relate or anybody with one pretending they were in its place. My favourite line was " but please don't kick me when you mess up!" It made me laugh. My only wish is add commas and period so we know hos it's supposed to flow. Good job
Posted by: Conner L (Bonner) | May 7, 2006 04:58 PM
I liked how you described the locker but it would be nice if your poem flowed more. I really liked how you gave the locker feelings. Keep writing!!
Posted by: Hi Jo (Bonner) | May 22, 2006 02:17 PM